I brought my updated query letter to my monthly writer’s critique group last week.
(BTW, I highly recommend finding yourself a critique group. I found mine via the writer’s group at my public library.)
They gave me some great feedback that I incorporated. I’m pretty sure this is the final draft. See if you agree.
Mystics of Sonoduhl is a completed epic fantasy of 90,500 words with series potential. It compares with Naomi Novik’s Uprooted as well as classics like Terry Brooks’ Shannara series.
Maghrurio is a middle-aged nobody working for Abner, the Mystic of Decra. When a fiery explosion fatally injures the Mystic, he asks Maghrurio with his dying breath to find his assassin.
He also makes Maghurio the newest Mystic.
With no magical skills or training, Maghrurio has his work cut out for him. He must venture forth, uncovering the assassin’s true motives while avoiding the clutches of a power-hungry duke.
Accompanied by Abner’s housekeeper and an apothecary he barely knows, Maghrurio is forced to overcome his imposter syndrome and prevent the destruction of the Mystic order.
Along the way he uncovers a startling possibility–is the assassin a Mystic himself?
Along the way he uncovers a startling possibility–the assassin may be a Mystic himself…
UPDATE: I read someplace that some agents dislike rhetorical questions, so I’ve replaced the last sentence.